Thread:SibunaSeason34/@comment-4816103-20150219211050

So basically the story followed four teenagers who I'll describe soon that, after some weird stuff happened, find themselves in the middle of this weird conspiracy and two different groups- The Golden Alliance, and The Legion. The Golden Alliance seems to be trying to kill them and they don't know why. The Legion winds up helping them.

In the end it turns out one of the teenagers is this thing called a Dark Lion- a lion brand of werebeast that comes out as a fight or flight mechanism- when they are in extreme pain, they turn into a huge lion and destroy shit, and then they die because of all the energy it takes. The Golden Alliance was planning on using this guy as a bomb- get him hurt so badly that he turns into the lion and have this bracelet on him that will explode and destroy like an entire block. They wanted to take over the world.

In the rewrite, I'd have the Golden Alliance be a group of well intentioned extremists trying to rid the world of "monsters", while the Legion protects them and hides them because, well, they aren't all evil and a lot of them are just normal people their entire life without awakening their beast side.

The characters were...

Jackie North, a skater chick who dies her hair red and is a bit of a control freak. Based off Patricia in some aspects and Nina in others. The leader of the group.

Ben Locke, a dude who is rather obsessed with photography and being an investigative reporter. Always has his camera with him to take pictures and often is a conspiracy theorist.

Leslie Ross, the shy nerdy one who also falls in love kind of fast. Possibly the most boring character in the story, but she also can shoot a gun really well. When I rewrite she'll definitely get a personality update to be more interesting.

And finally, the main character,

Casper Sweet (wonder where that last name came from, hehe...), a gothic guy who listens to metal music and wasn't originally part of the group, he moved in and just sort of got involved and became their friend. A poet. Also the Dark Lion.

...Also, there was a dude named Robert Green who tagged along with them, Leslie had a crush on him and Casper hated him, and he was the son of the Alliance leader playing the mole. His real name was Malcolm Gold. Everyone hated him so I definitely need to rewrite or abandon his character.

And their home lives suck. Jackie has like 6 siblings and is the middle child so she often gets forgotten, ignored, or what have you while her house is chaotic and her siblings do whatever they want. Ben's dad was shot when he was a little kid and it's what convinced him to take up journalism. His stepfather is an asshole who really sort of makes it obvious how he disapproves of Ben's hobby and his stepsister gets treated better while his mom doesn't do anything about it. Leslie has an older brother she never sees anymore and she was close to him, but because he got poor grades and is living as a bartender miles away her parents think he's a failure and don't let her contact them. They pressure her to study nonstop and get good grades even when it's, like, the middle of summer. She finds out she was adopted and believes she's only there so her parents can have a second chance at having a "successful" child. Casper's dad cheated on his mother when he was a kid. His mother left them and left Casper behind because he looked like his dad. He never saw her or heard from her since. Now he lives with his dad and their lover, who he ended up marrying, and blames them for everything that happned.  