Thread:Corbierr/@comment-24596535-20141025172107/@comment-4816103-20141109200326

'''Hmm, wait, this feels like it'll be a long-ass chapter. You wanted to add the Jake and Chance fight thing too, right? We should probably break it up to pace it out a bit and maybeeee hold off on things like Jake and Michelle talking to each-other for a chapter or two so we can establish her going down there and stuff and we can show Jake wondering where she is but not finding her yet. Royle's nightmare can open chapter 2, maybe. '''