User blog comment:Corbierr/Fanfiction Reviews - 2/@comment-13880098-20141030194550/@comment-4816103-20141030201250

Sorry babe

lol OKAY

- True, climaxes are awesome. Maybe you could try starting in Media Res for once- jump right into the action. Or do what I do and just write shit at the beginning until I legitimately get into the story, and go back and edit it.

- Yeahhhh that makes sense TBH the only ones that really bugged me were Nina and Joy. :P

- Shut up ur amazing

-Yes, yes, Victor's death was great.

-True.

- Yeah, yeah

- It was pretty good anyways, I just feel like it was missing a slight element of depth :P

- THAT'D BE SO COOL

- Well not to me but then again I saw it as like a creepypasta type thing. For others, it probably wouldn't have been horrifying, but due to the shorter length, the horror and gore felt...more intense than it did in EYS where you got a break every now and then. It was like, idk, more creepy and disturbing than "scary"

Haley you're a fantastic writer DON'T WORRY even when you rush it's still good