Thread:Corbierr/@comment-24596535-20141025172107/@comment-4816103-20141107192617

That was good! I just think that if you want it to sound better, don't use their names so often. Once you get their names out there you can use more creative terms. He, she, maybe even something like "the musical girl" or "the guitarist".

But I liked the dialogue itself, and the characters!

So we aren't doing this in script, then?